ESPIONAGE REPORT:
A Comparison Chart For Inquisitive Readers
FIRST DRAFT
SECOND DRAFT
Quilters Guild meeting is full of women. Quilters Guild meeting is full of men.
Spy recruiter is man in business suit with dark sunglasses. Spy recruiter is woman in business suit with dark sunglasses.
Protagonist is Evelyn Hudson, who does not seem to understand her husband's power tools and his other objects of manliness. Protagonist is James Hudson, who does not seem to understand his wife's power tools and her other objects of manliness.
Mrs. Kilroy stays at home while her husband works. Mr. Kilroy stays at home while his wife works.
Mr. Kilroy smokes cigars and lends a "thing" to Evelyn's husband. Mrs. Kilroy smokes cigars and lends a "thing" to James' wife.
Evelyn Hudson wears a blouse. James Hudson wears a blouse.
Evelyn's husband reaches into her panties. James' wife reaches into his panties.
Evelyn seems clueless about world affairs; her husband is more interested in drinking beer. James seems clueless about world affairs; his wife is more interested in drinking beer.
Author came to realize the story was stereotypical in its descriptions of men and women. Author wonders if the story makes any sense.

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